03-26-2025, 12:03 AM
==Good evening, Cadet! I am Commander Carrs and I will be assisting you with your bio!
Overall this is an excellent piece of work! I have a few comments to make that I'd like you to address before we move forward, however:
1) I'd like to see something in the Personal History section about Michael's time at the Academy; did he do well? Did he have friends? That kind of thing.
2) I'd like you to carefully go through the Personal History again and correct the spelling and grammatical errors. (I'm not going to point them out on a public thread, if you need help identifying them, please DM me.)
Once those two changes have been made, I can get an Instructor assigned to you and we can get you posting!==
Overall this is an excellent piece of work! I have a few comments to make that I'd like you to address before we move forward, however:
1) I'd like to see something in the Personal History section about Michael's time at the Academy; did he do well? Did he have friends? That kind of thing.
2) I'd like you to carefully go through the Personal History again and correct the spelling and grammatical errors. (I'm not going to point them out on a public thread, if you need help identifying them, please DM me.)
Once those two changes have been made, I can get an Instructor assigned to you and we can get you posting!==