01-05-2025, 08:03 PM
== Apologies for the delay in responding. Typically, the weeks surrounding Christmas and New Years are a little more slower as people are traveling and enjoying time with their families. I hope you had a great holiday! ==
Overall, your post looks very good. You did a very good job of conveying your character's thoughts and feelings. You also utilized the italics and bold correctly! Just be careful about placing your character somewhere someone has already established arriving at as it can devolve into hijacking territory very easily or can cause issues with GMs. In this instance, no harm, no foul.
Now, on to our next lesson!
Our next lesson will concern Plots and GM Input. We have two types of plots here on Federation Space: the main plot and subplots. While the main plot affects the entire ship, a subplot is an underlying story that’s being told within the main plot. While a main plot is directed by our GM, a subplot can be run by any player who has received prior approval by the ship’s CO or FO to run that particular subplot. An example of the difference between the two, is that the main story would be the ship falling under attack, whereas the subplot would be a character having to deal with an on ship pregnancy, or perhaps trying to write the next great holonovel.
Here on Federation Space, our Game Moderators (GMs) help to guide our ships’ missions along. Each ship has a mission, of which only the GMs of a ship know. This helps to add a bit of suspense and mystery to the game because if you knew what was going happen it wouldn’t be a very fun game.
Your job is to write what your character sees, and what their reaction is. The GM fills in any unknowns about the plot. GMs give input on things that have significance to the direction of the mission. This is why we need to keep our posts open ended on anything that might affect the mission’s outcome. By that I mean, anything that might affect the mission’s direction or outcome, have it so your character performs the action, but leave the outcome unknown. An example of this would be if you were running a diagnostic scan: while you can perform the scan, you need to leave the result open ended for the GM to fill in. While such a scan might seem trivial to you, you don’t know what the GM has planned for what it is you’re scanning.
When you need GM input on something, you just put the following at the end of your post:
== GM Input, please. ==
You can also make it more specific request, such as:
== GM Input – Result of the diagnostic, please. ==
To get a good feel of what GM input is, look around at the active ships and see how they use it.
I would like to point out that at the top of our forums there is a tab that says "view new content". This tab is a quick and handy way to see who has posted since your previous visit to Fed-Space!
Alright, time for more writing! From now on I will be acting as a GM for you. In your next post, please find a way to ask for GM input. If you need any help, or would like some more clarification, don’t hesitate to ask! I would like you to practice using bold and italics in this post once more. ==
It wasn't that Beka hadn't noticed the young man pacing a few steps away from the holodeck panel when she arrived and it wasn't that her brain hadn't made the assessment that this was her impending exam participant. However, she'd been so focused on keying in the appropriate program and ensuring that it matched what was to be proctored that she merely pushed the fact to the side until the young man spoke up.
Her sharp green eyes came up to regard the young man, who had ceased his pacing in favor of standing at ease. There was still a restless quality to the young man that Beka saw regularly but she'd prefer nervous and anxious over overly confident and cocky. There seemed to be a very potent correlation between the cadets initial behavior and their success as her last exam demonstrated clearly.
Had her nerves not been frayed from her previous exam, she might have taken a moment to offer the young man an assurance and some small talk to settle his nerves but truthfully, she just didn't have it in her at the moment.
Instead, she offered him a wry smile. "Cadet, thank you for being so punctual."
Her agile fingers pressed another command on the console and the holodeck doors yawned open to reveal the gray paneling of a corridor under standard lighting. She motioned for Alden to step inside ahead of her.
"If you're ready to begin, you are currently assigned as a security officer aboard the USS Gettysburg. You've been assigned to a standard patrol and are equipped with a standard side arm and tricorder. I will be present but not a part of the scenario. Just remember everything you've learned in the last four years and you will be fine."
For a few moments, the corridor was eerily quiet, even a boot fall at the end of the corridor likely would have rung out clearly, and then, the corridor exploded in a blaring klaxon. [Intruder Alert. Intruder Alert. Deck 15, Section 6. Intruder Alert. Deck 15, Section 6.]
A glance at the nearest deck marking told Alden he was on Deck 15, Section 5...
== Over to you! ==
Overall, your post looks very good. You did a very good job of conveying your character's thoughts and feelings. You also utilized the italics and bold correctly! Just be careful about placing your character somewhere someone has already established arriving at as it can devolve into hijacking territory very easily or can cause issues with GMs. In this instance, no harm, no foul.
Now, on to our next lesson!
Our next lesson will concern Plots and GM Input. We have two types of plots here on Federation Space: the main plot and subplots. While the main plot affects the entire ship, a subplot is an underlying story that’s being told within the main plot. While a main plot is directed by our GM, a subplot can be run by any player who has received prior approval by the ship’s CO or FO to run that particular subplot. An example of the difference between the two, is that the main story would be the ship falling under attack, whereas the subplot would be a character having to deal with an on ship pregnancy, or perhaps trying to write the next great holonovel.
Here on Federation Space, our Game Moderators (GMs) help to guide our ships’ missions along. Each ship has a mission, of which only the GMs of a ship know. This helps to add a bit of suspense and mystery to the game because if you knew what was going happen it wouldn’t be a very fun game.
Your job is to write what your character sees, and what their reaction is. The GM fills in any unknowns about the plot. GMs give input on things that have significance to the direction of the mission. This is why we need to keep our posts open ended on anything that might affect the mission’s outcome. By that I mean, anything that might affect the mission’s direction or outcome, have it so your character performs the action, but leave the outcome unknown. An example of this would be if you were running a diagnostic scan: while you can perform the scan, you need to leave the result open ended for the GM to fill in. While such a scan might seem trivial to you, you don’t know what the GM has planned for what it is you’re scanning.
When you need GM input on something, you just put the following at the end of your post:
== GM Input, please. ==
You can also make it more specific request, such as:
== GM Input – Result of the diagnostic, please. ==
To get a good feel of what GM input is, look around at the active ships and see how they use it.
I would like to point out that at the top of our forums there is a tab that says "view new content". This tab is a quick and handy way to see who has posted since your previous visit to Fed-Space!
Alright, time for more writing! From now on I will be acting as a GM for you. In your next post, please find a way to ask for GM input. If you need any help, or would like some more clarification, don’t hesitate to ask! I would like you to practice using bold and italics in this post once more. ==
It wasn't that Beka hadn't noticed the young man pacing a few steps away from the holodeck panel when she arrived and it wasn't that her brain hadn't made the assessment that this was her impending exam participant. However, she'd been so focused on keying in the appropriate program and ensuring that it matched what was to be proctored that she merely pushed the fact to the side until the young man spoke up.
Her sharp green eyes came up to regard the young man, who had ceased his pacing in favor of standing at ease. There was still a restless quality to the young man that Beka saw regularly but she'd prefer nervous and anxious over overly confident and cocky. There seemed to be a very potent correlation between the cadets initial behavior and their success as her last exam demonstrated clearly.
Had her nerves not been frayed from her previous exam, she might have taken a moment to offer the young man an assurance and some small talk to settle his nerves but truthfully, she just didn't have it in her at the moment.
Instead, she offered him a wry smile. "Cadet, thank you for being so punctual."
Her agile fingers pressed another command on the console and the holodeck doors yawned open to reveal the gray paneling of a corridor under standard lighting. She motioned for Alden to step inside ahead of her.
"If you're ready to begin, you are currently assigned as a security officer aboard the USS Gettysburg. You've been assigned to a standard patrol and are equipped with a standard side arm and tricorder. I will be present but not a part of the scenario. Just remember everything you've learned in the last four years and you will be fine."
For a few moments, the corridor was eerily quiet, even a boot fall at the end of the corridor likely would have rung out clearly, and then, the corridor exploded in a blaring klaxon. [Intruder Alert. Intruder Alert. Deck 15, Section 6. Intruder Alert. Deck 15, Section 6.]
A glance at the nearest deck marking told Alden he was on Deck 15, Section 5...
== Over to you! ==